“No way, I’m not giving the cat a bath. Remember last time!” I shouted to mum.
Mum loves her cat but she never takes care of it. I really want a dog so I thought if I took care of Mr Snuggles I could persuade mum to get me one.
But last time I gave the cat a bath, it knocked down the orange scented washing powder all over me.
“He’s a mysterious spy cat whose mission is to drench you with washing powder” she laughed.
“We’re separated now!” I snapped.
Well done Jen! I like the way you have incorporated these seemingly incompatible words to form an interesting piece of writing. Keep it up. Ms Drapac
Well done although the “separated” is a little misused.
Hi Jen,
We have just read your challenge within our Year 6 class. We really liked it. Well done for using all of the words that were needed. We particularly liked your description of the orange scented washing powder instead of just saying washing powder. However, some of my class thought it could have been improved by saying how things were done (i.e. using an adverb) such as carelessly knocked down… or completely drench….
Well done. Why don’t you have a look at our blog and comment on one of our challenges. http://www.y6pewithall.primaryblogger.co.uk
Thanks Mr Eitel-Smith for your comments. We will check out your blog. I have added it to the blogroll.
Hi my name is Mitchell, heres two stars and a wish:
* Good use of words given.
* Correct use of speech
Wish: Use better vocab like diminutive.
Please comment on my work at http://year6bellevue2012.primaryblogger.co.uk/tag/mitchell/
Hi Jen
Well done on using all those words – it was a real challenge this week. I like the way you use dialogue in your writing, it’s very effective.
Our school has just started blogging, and have just begun doing the 100 Word Challenges. They’d love you to take a look and leave a comment
http://st-pauls-and-all-hallows-cofe-junior-school1.j2webby.com/?cat=4
Thanks for your comments Mrs Isik. I have added your blog to our blogroll.
Well done Jen, this week’s 100wc was challenging. Keep writing. To improve your work be sure to read through carefully.